There is something very deep and very lovely about this. I am going to be mindful of it for quite some time I think.
There was also a very satisfying ending in the sense of completion - by which I mean the purpose of her lifetime had been completed. I like how you introduce the press invention too. It's like that invention will do her communication role for her from now on.
Her final self-realisation at the end is also very clever. Realising that this is a series of lives and a growth spiral.
And so we see the end of the second part. I liked the more exploratory feeling of this one in contrast to the first. I do wish there had been more time given to how Xenia's home community changed based on the information she brought back, and a full conversation or two with Denon and Fren. This chapter felt a bit rushed to me, like things moved too fast without enough time for depth.
The chart of different souls adds a lot when it comes to comparing the characters between different parts. Aurea was content never leaving the village, while Xenia is the one to leave and come back with knowledge of the world beyond. It comes through with the title of this part, Xenia's journey was about finding other people and communicating with them. I think the titles for each life part add a nice flavor to them.
For the other characters, Ambassador Citor remains a symbol of the outside world as Thallon Reides, but this time his role is entirely through the books he wrote. Luna = Fren isn't a connection I think I would have made on my own, but I suppose the link is ignorance, even when in the same age group Xenia ends up with more knowledge. Meanwhile the aunts go from teaching Aurea about her home to teaching Xenia about the other communities. Also find it interesting how Alaster's role is so minor compared to his presence as Caelum, yet they remain similar.
It will be fun to keep track of all the parallels and contrasts in future life paths.
I wish for that too! unfortunately the story is already incredibly long and I still have so much more to write so I have to be very strict with what I spend time on, only including what is absolutely necessary to the premise. Im afraid it wont ever fit in one book if I ever pay to have it published in print and I guess I could split it up into multiple books but I dont like doing that (I always felt gypped when authors did that). You've caught on very well and that gives me hope that it will not be too overwhelming for everyone and some people will be able to enjoy the added dimension of how the characters evolve. Thank you so much for this!
There is something very deep and very lovely about this. I am going to be mindful of it for quite some time I think.
There was also a very satisfying ending in the sense of completion - by which I mean the purpose of her lifetime had been completed. I like how you introduce the press invention too. It's like that invention will do her communication role for her from now on.
Her final self-realisation at the end is also very clever. Realising that this is a series of lives and a growth spiral.
Well, I just really loved it! Thank you!
No thank you! I deeply appreciate all the kind sentiments and that you made it all the way here.
And so we see the end of the second part. I liked the more exploratory feeling of this one in contrast to the first. I do wish there had been more time given to how Xenia's home community changed based on the information she brought back, and a full conversation or two with Denon and Fren. This chapter felt a bit rushed to me, like things moved too fast without enough time for depth.
The chart of different souls adds a lot when it comes to comparing the characters between different parts. Aurea was content never leaving the village, while Xenia is the one to leave and come back with knowledge of the world beyond. It comes through with the title of this part, Xenia's journey was about finding other people and communicating with them. I think the titles for each life part add a nice flavor to them.
For the other characters, Ambassador Citor remains a symbol of the outside world as Thallon Reides, but this time his role is entirely through the books he wrote. Luna = Fren isn't a connection I think I would have made on my own, but I suppose the link is ignorance, even when in the same age group Xenia ends up with more knowledge. Meanwhile the aunts go from teaching Aurea about her home to teaching Xenia about the other communities. Also find it interesting how Alaster's role is so minor compared to his presence as Caelum, yet they remain similar.
It will be fun to keep track of all the parallels and contrasts in future life paths.
I wish for that too! unfortunately the story is already incredibly long and I still have so much more to write so I have to be very strict with what I spend time on, only including what is absolutely necessary to the premise. Im afraid it wont ever fit in one book if I ever pay to have it published in print and I guess I could split it up into multiple books but I dont like doing that (I always felt gypped when authors did that). You've caught on very well and that gives me hope that it will not be too overwhelming for everyone and some people will be able to enjoy the added dimension of how the characters evolve. Thank you so much for this!